Posted by Diamond Jester on Mon Jan 10 17:57:20 2000: IP Address: 24.66.127.34
This is the first poem I have ever written and I would like some feedback on it.
Be honest but be gentle. Thanx.
Blacken Love
My heart pounds with a violent Rage
Dripping red through the black
Like a wounded panther locked in a cage
Im never knew love until you came into my life
I can't make u understand what you mean to me
And then u cut me like a searing knife
All I am and all I have I owe to you
I'm lost inside and don't know what to do
The pain blackens my heart with hate
The end is near bound by a bloody violent fate
I run from the pain hoping to escape
But it surrounds me like a thick black cape
Now it's over and I wish it wasn't so
I can't stand the pain
So now I must go
So farewell to u my dear
The blackness has comsumed me
There's nothing left but hate and fear.
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